Through the Eyes of...

Apex

I am working on a story for a school project so I figured I would post it here first #Tongue

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"We are under attack! This is not a drill!" I woke up to that sound 3 times this month, every time being a drill. I hatefully grabbed my gear and ran upstairs above ground and got to my post. As I got to the guard tower I saw John. "Charles said that this might be for real, they are moving the Maul out of the base. And there have been the sounds of vehicles nearby." "Maybe" I said, "but until then I will be on top of the tower looking out for nothing...again." I climbed up the tower and right as I reached the top, a rocket streaked past my face and hit a helicopter taking off.

After nearly talking a missile to the face, I quickly got off the tower and tried to find who nearly decapitated me. Only to find on of the biggest group of the People's Fist's military found so far. "We are going to evacuate!" The second I heard that I got into the truck next to me and waited for everyone to get on. Me and several other trucks left the base as they dealt with the heavy automated defenses left in the base.

This has to of been the seventh time we have lost a base to these rebels. Ever since Hanes McLanly(President of the United Earth Defenses) ordered the killing of the civilians they have had no problem gaining support.

Right as it looks safe a rocket truck ambushes the convoy. Rockets go everywhere as we lose 3 transport trucks and an APC. A well placed round took out the rocket truck. Out of nowhere a group of PF infantry launch a barrage of rockets that take out the convoy. I was lucky to of lived as the rocket that hit my truck hit more towards the back and I lived.

This is all I have atm. I will work on it more later.

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Liten · Scorpion Sniper **Joined**: 29 Sep 2008

WoW... Your good at this... Approved

DoMiNaNt_HuNtEr · Posted: Tue Oct 21, 2008 8:49 pm Post subject:

Definitely spread out the events that you just posted, add lots of funny (you might wanna skip out on the insane but funny; just stick with funny insults) dialouge between the soldiers that are on the verge of getting killed, add swearing, add descriptions of battles that are quite intense and detailed extensively.

Oh, and check your spelling. Choose your words carefully; I wouldn't use 'decapitated' for a MISSILE, aimed for the head - I would use explosive, words, but thats just me, the word technically does make sense in that context.

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MT · Posted: Wed Oct 22, 2008 2:48 am Post subject:

Nice

But please, use commas

Apex · Posted: Wed Oct 22, 2008 6:31 pm Post subject:

I barely remember the missile hitting. I came to about a minute after the attack. I knew that if I stayed I would be dead. I got out of that wreck of a truck and ran into the forest. At this point I only cared about escaping.

First thing I did after running was lose the military uniform to try and blend in. I then went to the now destroyed base posing as a POW that escaped from the camp. They seemed to buy the story as each military had soldiers from all over the world.

Ugh, outta time.

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Apex · Posted: Fri Oct 24, 2008 1:24 pm Post subject:

Then he lived with the People's Fist happily ever after... yeah I'm making a hasty end cause this is due in 2 hours #Tongue

. I will refine this for PPM when I have time.

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DoMiNaNt_HuNtEr · Posted: Fri Oct 24, 2008 1:35 pm Post subject:

lol, GO PPLZ FIST! *Clenches Fist*

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MT · Posted: Fri Oct 24, 2008 3:54 pm Post subject:

Apex wrote:

Then he lived with the People's Fist happily ever after... yeah I'm making a hasty end cause this is due in 2 hours #Tongue

. I will refine this for PPM when I have time.

lol, go procrastinators!

Apex · Posted: Fri Oct 24, 2008 5:18 pm Post subject:

Tomorrow...maybe...

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Liten · Scorpion Sniper **Joined**: 29 Sep 2008

Tomorrow is now. WE WANT MORE

Bugsey827 · Grenadier **Joined**: 15 Apr 2008

Nice

Although i could have got more description. Wink

Lt Albrecht · Posted: Sat Nov 29, 2008 2:43 pm Post subject:

Go for a more Catch-22 side, put some sane outlook on an insane world in there.

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